Kia Ora, My name is Mrs Aperahama and I am a teacher at Saint Mary's School. I am really impressed with the descriptive language you have used in your poem / description. If this poem had a soundtrack what would it sound like? Ma Te Wa Mrs Aperahama
Kia ora Blair, What a beautiful piece of writing. You have used descriptive words and phrases that describe The Sea. I really like phrases such as "soft popping bubbles". You have designed your work appropriately and the background adds to the theme of your work. I like the way your text is opaque and we can see the background behind it but at the same time see all the words clearly. Ka pai to mahi. Mrs Torrie
Kia Ora,its Shzstela from Kaikohe West School. I really liked how you described the ocean how the tide goes in and out. It reminded me of when I was out in Waimamaku with my brother , uncles and dad we also saw big huge king waves go in and out . But next time you could write about how you know all of these things about the sea.
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Kia Ora,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Mrs Aperahama and I am a teacher at Saint Mary's School. I am really impressed with the descriptive language you have used in your poem / description. If this poem had a soundtrack what would it sound like?
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Mrs Aperahama
Kia ora Blair,
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful piece of writing. You have used descriptive words and phrases that describe The Sea. I really like phrases such as "soft popping bubbles".
You have designed your work appropriately and the background adds to the theme of your work. I like the way your text is opaque and we can see the background behind it but at the same time see all the words clearly.
Ka pai to mahi.
Mrs Torrie
Kia Ora,its Shzstela from Kaikohe West School. I really liked how you described the ocean how the tide goes in and out. It reminded me of when I was out in Waimamaku with my brother , uncles and dad we also saw big huge king waves go in and out . But next time you could write about how you know all of these things about the sea.
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